Vision: I know for who it is, and it is very him. I even see him standing as spirit next to his stone, under the tree, watching over Yuki.
Originality: It's better then the original, the black gives a creepy atmosphere and how the rose is blinking out near the stone...love it!
Technique: I know you, you tried your best on it and I need to say, the perspective view is quite good. For the path of stones...maybe a nice advice, if you gonna draw something again. Search for some reference, it is not a shame to do it...I do it as well if I don't know it anymore...
Impact: Original: Okay, well done. This one: Wow...spooky yet a good impression of a graveyard...As a normal person, you shouldn't walk there...but for meeting that certain person...well, let's go!
I like this one alot....Keep up with the perspective view...you got in it to you ^^